Jean first went to the bathroom to wash and put a plaster on her cut.  Jean then ran up two flights of stairs and into her bedroom. She lay  some fresh newspaper on the floor where she would be working, Jean  thought that newspaper should be more colorful, not this boring black  and white, if Jean ever designed a newspaper it would be full of colors,  there would be hardly any black and white. The jars of paint had to be  mixed before used and when Jean opened the first jar of paint she smelt  the clean sort of acid smell, her dad always smelled of paint. First  Jean painted the white space yellow, then she painted the detail in  purple.  Jean imagined what might be behind the door... Jean looked out  the window, it was getting dark. Jean walked to the window, the stars  were burning as bright as silver. She stared passed the woods, over the  fields and all the way to the lake. Her father... Jean went into the  past...
Jean ran past her family, she held the umbrella high above  her head, she ran into the water fulled with glee. Jean turned the  umbrella upside down and pushed it out into the water. Jean swam next to  the umbrella as far as she could, when she got tired she climbed in.  Jean sat there for a minute or two thinking about how pretty everything  was.
"Jean!" Jean's dad, Charlie came swimming after her,
"Stay still Jean, I'll be there now, don't move!" 
"Daddy! look here, my umbrella floats!" Jean said standing up.
"Jean no!" Charlie swam as fast as he could but he was to late, Jean fell over into the water, Charlie screamed...
Jean lay gasping on the shore,
"DADDY!" she looked around, her mom Malory came to pick her up and as Malory did so Jean saw her father lying on the ground.
"Mummy  why is daddy on the ground?" Malory burst into tears but Jean never got  an answer, Jean still remembered the day she went into a great hall to  say goodbye to her dad...
Jean lay her head on the window sill  crying, she felt like it was her fault but she knew it was not. Jean  must have cried herself to sleep because Jean's mum woke her up and told  her to go to bed. Jean lay in bed looking at the door then something  very strange happened, the door started to glow...

I loved chapter 4 and the way you introduced Louie
ReplyDeleteSorry, I meant chapter 5 :)
ReplyDeleteTha-nksss-you-zz-bein-veri-niiii-ssss-daaaaddddiiii-luuuuu-vvvv-yooooooooo :)
ReplyDeleteIt is totally AWESOME!!!!! Well done Kath, well done!!
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