Monday, July 4, 2011

Chapter 4 Umbrella lake

Jean first went to the bathroom to wash and put a plaster on her cut. Jean then ran up two flights of stairs and into her bedroom. She lay some fresh newspaper on the floor where she would be working, Jean thought that newspaper should be more colorful, not this boring black and white, if Jean ever designed a newspaper it would be full of colors, there would be hardly any black and white. The jars of paint had to be mixed before used and when Jean opened the first jar of paint she smelt the clean sort of acid smell, her dad always smelled of paint. First Jean painted the white space yellow, then she painted the detail in purple.  Jean imagined what might be behind the door... Jean looked out the window, it was getting dark. Jean walked to the window, the stars were burning as bright as silver. She stared passed the woods, over the fields and all the way to the lake. Her father... Jean went into the past...
Jean ran past her family, she held the umbrella high above her head, she ran into the water fulled with glee. Jean turned the umbrella upside down and pushed it out into the water. Jean swam next to the umbrella as far as she could, when she got tired she climbed in. Jean sat there for a minute or two thinking about how pretty everything was.

"Jean!" Jean's dad, Charlie came swimming after her,
"Stay still Jean, I'll be there now, don't move!"
"Daddy! look here, my umbrella floats!" Jean said standing up.
"Jean no!" Charlie swam as fast as he could but he was to late, Jean fell over into the water, Charlie screamed...
Jean lay gasping on the shore,
"DADDY!" she looked around, her mom Malory came to pick her up and as Malory did so Jean saw her father lying on the ground.
"Mummy why is daddy on the ground?" Malory burst into tears but Jean never got an answer, Jean still remembered the day she went into a great hall to say goodbye to her dad...
Jean lay her head on the window sill crying, she felt like it was her fault but she knew it was not. Jean must have cried herself to sleep because Jean's mum woke her up and told her to go to bed. Jean lay in bed looking at the door then something very strange happened, the door started to glow...

4 comments:

  1. I loved chapter 4 and the way you introduced Louie

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  2. Tha-nksss-you-zz-bein-veri-niiii-ssss-daaaaddddiiii-luuuuu-vvvv-yooooooooo :)

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  3. It is totally AWESOME!!!!! Well done Kath, well done!!

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